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PostSubject: Jihibukaitsuta (Fin)   Sat Apr 05, 2014 3:13 pm

General information-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Name: (should be in Japanese, must provide a English translation)  Jihibukaitsuta (慈悲深い蔦| Benevolent Ivy)

Family: (metal,earth,wind,water,fire,light/holy,dark/shadow,poison,electricity,ice, plant,reiatsu,void,etc.) Poison

Manifestation-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Inner World:  ( image or detailed description is acceptable) http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2013/145/7/2/concept_tavern_by_stanislavnovarenko-d66jxqr.jpg


It's really a simple tavern. Nothings that special about it. It has a door in the right corner, which tends to be open and extends into an empty town. The town in a town one would see in a fantasy game. It's simple with corridors, and other such things. It has an armory that's full of weaker swords and such, and horses. These are mere apparitions, and things he can do within his Spirit world.

Although, in the Tavern itself, there is a table, rather sparesly covered in a somewhat dirty cloth. Dirty from all the sake and such spilled on it. They don't clean it, well, his zanpakto spirit doesn't clean it. Which is his job. Whenever something breaks in his spirit world, after he leaves it regens.

Appearance:  His spirit, is a bartender, a male one, that has long slick hair. The hair glistens like there's oil in it, and goes down to about his neck. His skin is tan, and tends to be as smooth as a babys skin. Hell, if you looked at him, first site would be thinking he's a model most likely. He also wears a black suit, with black pants.

On rare occasion, when Luci comes into the spirit world angry, the man tends to be wearing a leather coat(like a bikers)


Personality:  The spirit is a nice man as well, and tends to get along well with Lucius. The spirit is more simple then Lucius, much much more simple. He often tells fake tales of what happened outside the tavern inside his world. Although they may be real to him, they aren't actually real.

Since he's alone often, he tends to chat with himself, and is actually more intelligent then Lucius. He can fight, yet, if ever let out of his blade, he would be loyal still to Lucius.

Sealed State--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Appearance: (an image, detailed description or both are acceptable)  The katanas, while normal at heart, of some special marking gotten over the years.

Type: (Katana or Twin Katana) Twin Katanas

*camouflage:  (what is the blade concealed in? example being yamamoto's staff) Just it's sheath.

Shikai-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
*Note that this release is only available to those who possess the augment "Shikai".

release phrase:  (how do you call out your shikai) Numb Them, Jihibukaitsuta

Appearance:  (a detailed description of what the shikai looks like, an image is optional) http://illiweb.com/fa/pbucket.gif x2

Ability:  (what does the shikai do. be descriptive as possible.)

When coming in contact with the skin, the blade injects poison into the body of the person it touched, no one is immune to it. The poison numbs.
The poison takes 6 posts to fully numb.
Techs: ( may only have up to 7 techs unless a tech pack has been purchased. please use template below.)

Name: Needle firing
Description: Fires needles from the whip-blade.
Preparation Time: 0
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: 1 post

Bankai-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
*Note that this release is only available to those who possess the augment "Bankai".

Appearance:  (a detailed description of what the bankai looks like, an image is optional) It looks just like his Shikai

Character Change:  (how does your character change due to this release if any.) None

Ability:  (what does your bankai do) Instead of a numbing poison, it's an acidic poison. The poison take 3-4 posts to kill

Techs: (may only have up to 5 techs unless a tech pack has been purchased. please use template below)

Name: Needle firing
Description: Fires needles with poison on them
Preparation Time: (Put N/A if there is none)
Duration:1
Cooldown:1


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PostSubject: Re: Jihibukaitsuta (Fin)   Sun Apr 13, 2014 2:11 pm

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When coming in contact with the skin, the blade injects poison into the body of the person it touched, no one is immune to it. The poison numbs.
The poison takes 6 posts to fully numb.
This makes no sense, if "no one" is immune then what happens if you get struck? Poisons have different effects and amounts that work on different people, please edit the idea of no one being immune. Please delete out the questions in the front before your answer in each portion. for example, under name simply put Jihibukai Tsuta but don't put the stuff in parentheses. appearance needs words. Personality is too short. This needs to be beefed up in all aspects and further explained. For a lieutenant's blade, there should be way more information listed. Please complete these changes and I'll review again. Thanks
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